From the Fredericksburg, Va., Free LanceStar, April 20, 2015.
This story is about Bill Rhodes, a Marine assigned to the island of Tinian during World War II. The planes that dropped atomic bombs on Hiroshima and Nagasaki flew from an airfield on Tinian.
But the mushroom clouds didnt explode, and they werent visible on the horizon from Tinian. Tinian is 1,300 miles from Japan.
Colorful language in nonfiction can be good, but it should be accurate, or it wont be nonfiction any more. It would be a correct metaphor to say that the clouds boiled up, but they didnt explode; the bombs exploded, and the mushroom clouds resulted.
Dont let this happen to you: Make sure that colorful language gives more information, not misinformation.
* Steves Hall of Shame is what one writer called my collection of bloopers. I decided to keep the name.